‘Flash’back…to my first ever published fiction… “Remember”…

For years I played around with writing, and, like many aspiring writers, got ‘pats on the back’ from family and close friends.

Back in November 2008, I wrote the piece of ‘flash’ below. Somewhat apprehensively, I sent it to an extremely supportive friend, author Matt Hilton, who’d just started the, now award-winning, ezine, Thrillers, Killers ‘n’ Chillers

On January 31st 2009, “Remember” was the 6th story to appear on the ezine, and my first ever for public consumption. I was elated when the feedback received was positive, and this spurred me on massively.  

A month later, Matt invited me to become co-editor! 

I do hope you enjoy…

REMEMBER

Dear Charles,

I remember the way you used to stroke my hair, caress my skin and kiss my neck. Yes, I still recall those times vividly. The anticipation, as I waited for you to return from work, the door slamming and the footsteps on the stairs. Then, the smell of tobacco on your breath (why did you have to smoke?). My heart is palpitating just thinking about it all.

How many years did it last? I can’t be sure really, but it was a good while. I did suspect there were others, you know. Remember the time I caught you with Jess? I could see how awkward you felt. And, I’m sure you and Lucy had something going on. I knew you too damned well, didn’t I?

After it ended, maybe you thought time would make me forget. How wrong you were! Now I have a family of my own, though you’ll never see them. How long have you got left in there? Three years, is it?

I believe you’re very sick now. Well, I remember you as being very sick then! You will die where you belong, in prison. Remember my tears? Well, who’s crying now, Dad?

Cassie

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About Col Bury

Col Bury is the former crime editor of award winning ezine, Thrillers, Killers 'n' Chillers. Col's short stories can be found scattered around the net, and in anthologies, including, The Mammoth Books of Best British Crime 9, 10 & 11. He is the author of the eBooks, Manchester 6 and The Cops of Manchester. Col's debut crime novel, MY KIND OF JUSTICE was published by Caffeine Nights in 2015. He blogs, reviews and interviews crime authors at http://colburysnewcrimefiction.blogspot.com/
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5 Responses to ‘Flash’back…to my first ever published fiction… “Remember”…

  1. Col Bury says:

    Thanks for the ratings, likes and comments on FB, etc.
    Ps. I accidentally clicked ‘like’ & can’t undo it – I’m not that sad! 🙂

  2. This was your first story, Col? Twisted. The ending makes it all the more wicked and I love the cleverness of form.

  3. David Barber says:

    Nice work, my friend, nicve work. Well written and I like the style of it. Great ending too!

  4. Col Bury says:

    Cheers, Dave. Call yerself an editor! 🙂

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